Please read my play and tell me if it is any good. Please provide any feedback possible because this is one of my final projects.
It is not done. (BTW the length is 1 Act 3 Scenes)
No plagiarism please
Vanish In an Instant
ACT 1
Scene 1
Characters:
Quimby Haps, 19, SF (special forces) Soldier
Jim Burg, 25, SF (special forces) Soldier
SGT. Berkely, 38, SF (special forces) Sergeant
Setting:
Helicopter flying over Area 51 (desert, middle of nowhere), full of troops including Quimby and Jim. SGT. Berkely is standing near the front of the helicopter
At rise:
SGT. Berkely is talking to Quimby and Jim.
SGT. BERKELY
What is wrong with you Quimby?
QUIMBY
(salutes)
Sir, I feel that I do not want to participate in this war, Sir!
SGT. BERKELY
And why is that son?
QUIMBY
Sir, I think that this war is a threat to humanity and should have never been started, Sir!
SGT. BERKELY
Jim, do you feel the same?
JIM
Quite the opposite, Sir!
SGT. BERKELY
Well Quimby you want to stop this war right?
QUIMBY
Sir, yes, Sir!
SGT. BERKELY
Then help us and annihilate these aliens!
QUIMBY
Sir, yes, Sir!
(Exit SGT. Berkely)
Yeah, whatever
JIM
How long are you going to stay in this army?
QUIMBY
Until I am done with college
JIM
Then why don’t you have fun in the meantime?
QUIMBY
I do not support war. I was having fun in the meantime until our squadron got this assignment
Why are you in the army?
JIM
It was an available job that gave me a good amount of money, why else?
QUIMBY
You don’t care about what type of job it is?
JIM
No, I just go with the flow. You see I really never had a dream of doing anything in particular, I wanted to do everything. So I am going by life’s path
QUIMBY
Oh yeah right, everyone has a dream. My dream currently is to finish college and get out of the Army
JIM
(Chuckles)
Oh well, it seems that I cannot knock sense into you
(Enter SGT. Berkely)
QUIMBY
Sense of what?
JIM
The fact that you have to build yourself from the ground up. Can a house be built from the roof to the bottom? No
QUIMBY
What does this have to do with my ambition to create a company right after college?
JIM
What I am trying to say is that you have to go by steps, nothing will happen overnight. You may think that working in the army has no way or form to do with anything you have in mind but it is a step, a step that could help you to your future company
SGT. BERKELY
Get ready boys! We’re about to land! Lock and load!
(The back of the helicopter is hit and explodes. The helicopter is spun out of control)
JIM
OH woah!
SGT. BERKELY
Hold on tight boys! It’s goin’ to be a nasty ride!
QUIMBY
Get me out of here someone. I want to leave this war and army as soon as possible
(The helicopter crashes half a mile from Area 51)
(Quimby, Jim, and SGT. Berkely dispatch from the helicopter and crouch behind a boulder)
SGT. BERKELY
All right troops! Move out!
JIM
C’mon Quimby
QUIMBY
Ugh, coming
(Jim and Quimby run towards Area 51)
Scene 2
Characters:
Quimby Haps, 19, SF (special forces) Soldier
Jim Burg, 25, SF (special forces) Soldier
Setting:
Desert battle field. Area 51 is seen in the distance. Alien troops are bombarding the Human troops with artillery. Quimby and Jim are advancing forward.
At rise:
Jim and Quimby are both crouching behind a rock
(Explosions)
JIM
Quimby! Throw a grenade!
QUIMBY
I don’t have any! Why would I have some?
JIM
This is a life or death situation, no fooling around!
QUIMBY
I am serious! Get off my back
(An alien tries to slash Jim with a sword but misses and is shot by Jim)
JIM
C’mon get back to reality! You are a soldier!
QUIMBY
Not one if I don’t want to be
JIM
Oh, here’s our chance! Move out!
(Jim and Quimby both crouch and run and advance a great deal of distance)
JIM
Take cover!
(Quimby crouches behind a barrier and Jim next to him)
QUIMBY
How far are we from this stupid research facility?
JIM
Shut up and help me shoot!
(Jim shoots down several aliens)
QUIMBY
Yeah, yeah!
JIM
Alright! Go, go, go!
QUIMBY
Great
(An alien bomb explodes and launches Jim into the air. He lands onto Quimby)
QUIMBY
Hey! Get off!
(Quimby shoves Jim off of him. Jim is lying on the ground in the open slightly injured)
JIM
Help! Get me covered!!!
QUIMBY
(Ignores Jim)
God, I got sand in my suit!
(An alien notices Jim and starts to run toward him)
JIM
Quimby! Help, an alien!
QUIMBY
Huh? … Oh fine…
(Quimby takes out the running alien)
JIM
Get me covered! I can barely move!
QUIMBY
Ok, ok, dang!
JIM
What the hell is wrong with you?
QUIMBY
What?
JIM
I could have been killed
QUIMBY
‘Could have’ is the key word
JIM
Oh my God you are hopeless
QUIMBY
The fire stopped let’s move forward and get this over with!
JIM
But you will have to let me lean on you, I can barely walk
QUIMBY
Fine! Hold on
(Quimby and Jim reach the entrance to the research facility. A bomb blows up near the two and aliens start to run towards them. A shard of the building wall falls and traps Quimby’s leg)
QUIMBY
Help!
JIM
Grab hold of my hand and stay low!
(Aliens are firing at the two)
(Quimby gets loose)
Argh! There you go!
QUIMBY
Let’s go! Hurry! … Behind that rock!
(Quimby and Jim both take cover behind a boulder right outside of the entrance)
You see that? I could have been killed!
JIM
‘Could have’ is the key word
QUIMBY
You know it’s no use mocking me!
JIM
Let’s finish this mission!
(Jim runs off)
QUIMBY
Hey! Wait!
(Quimby runs after Jim)
Scene 3
Characters:
Quimby Haps, 19, SF (special forces) Soldier
Jim Burg, 25, SF (special forces) Soldier
Medic
Setting:
Area 51 research facility. The facility is ruined; all equipment is either overturned or destroyed. Alien noises and human screams are heard in the distance.
At rise:
Jim and Quimby are both stealthily walking around the facility looking for any hostages
JIM
Shsssh, did you hear that?
QUIMBY
What? An ice cream truck?
JIM
Get into the real world or leave
QUIMBY
I will as soon as I start doing what I want to do, not this Army crap
JIM
Shsssh, I hear someone coming
(An Alien patrols and does not take notice of Jim or Quimby hiding in the shadows)
Now!
(Jim darts forward and attacks the Alien while Quimby ties the Alien up)
QUIMBY
Eww, I got slime all over my hand
JIM
Man up!
QUIMBY
Oh Shut up!
(Pause for 2 seconds. Distant screams are heard)
That way
(Points forward)
JIM
We’ve got to hurry!
QUIMBY
Why are we here again?
JIM
Cleanse this place of Aliens
QUIMBY
Why aren’t I in my dream job?
JIM
Because you are too impatient and you want everything your way
QUIMBY
Huh, yeah, like I think like that
JIM
(Chuckles)
What do you think you have been talking about for the past 2 hours?
QUIMBY
Har, har, har, talk about me when I am really mad
JIM
Mad about what?
(An Alien walks in front and notices the two)
Quick, get covered!
QUIMBY
(Ignores)
Mad that I have to go through this. Does it even seem logic—
(Alien shoots Quimby and Jim shoots the Alien)
—al, ugh. No!, this can not be it. I have to get—
JIM
Farther into your life? So far that you do not enjoy it now? Being impatient only brings one’s end
(Jim kneels besides Quimby)
QUIMBY
What?! Are you going to mock me some more? Hear my words, this is not the end. Call a medic, I’ll be fine. I did not bring my own end I want only to fast forward to the parts I want when I want
JIM
Call a medic? Really
QUIMBY
This is a serious situation! I am lying on the floor dying
JIM
Well, since giving you advice before did not help at all, I am now going to mock you
QUIMBY
Are you mad?
JIM
Are you without sense?
QUIMBY
Quick call a medic and end my pain!
JIM
Oh, I will. Don’t worry about that
QUIMBY
Took a while!
(Jim pulls out his radio and calls a medic)
JIM
Medic! Medic!
QUIMBY
(Cough’s up blood)
Ugh, I can’t go much longer!
(Quimby becomes unconscious)
JIM
One who skips and drops life’s lessons does not get to see the end. Maybe you should listen once in a while. Gain wisdom from the ones who talk now because they may not be here in an instant
(Medic arrives along with two soldiers)
MEDIC
Where’s the problem?
JIM
Over here
(Points at Quimby)
(Medic walks over and starts to treat Quimby)
MEDIC
It seems that he has an infection of some sort on his arm where he was struck. Unfortunately it is spreading rapidly and he needs immediate treatment with no distractions
JIM
What do you suppose we do?
MEDIC
I will carry him to a safe excavated place in the facility. I will report back with results
(Medic exits)
JIM
Ah, by myself again
(Walks forward and into a scientist lab)
Ooo, look at this goo! I wonder what it is made of
(Jim walks around and observes for 4 seconds)
(Alien noises in a short distance)
What was that?
(An Alien jumps out of the shadows and attacks Jim, killing him)
25 minutes later
(Enter Medic and Quimby)
MEDIC
Jim, I have gre—
(Looks at Jim’s corpse)
Oh my! What has happened here?
(Medic walks forward to work on Jim)
QUIMBY
(Looks at Jim’s corpse)
Huh, one who does not listen to wisdom may see it vanish in an instant. Isn’t that what you said?
(Sobbing)
Thanks
(End of play)
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