One thing I noticed when I zoomed in is that you use way too many colors. Most of them are very similar to one another. also, the ears are too long, and stick out as if they are connected to the front of the face. You need to make them a bit darker. I am unsure of how you want this style to look like but judging from your other post about this style, you're going for the Skyward Sword look. You need to pay close attention that you only really need about 3-4 colors per shade to replicate the effect of Skyward Swords painting effect. Another thing that stuck out to me is that you pillow shaded the head, this is never a good idea. The horns are too small in ratio to the head, and are barely noticeable. The nose in your second version is too small and flat. In Skyward Sword, the nose is big and round, like a balloon. It separates the eyes, and covers the mouth a little bit.
You need to make your shadows darker as well.
