When I said connectors I meant conjunctions... sorry if I didn't explain it very well.
I meant that, the sentences of the text are too numerous and short. For instance, when you wrote: "I dropped it in the mud. I picked it up again, pulled out a match, and lit it. The wind blew it out before I could light the candle. I cursed silently and felt around in the mud for the matchbox again. I pulled out one more match and lit the candle."
You could've written: "But I dropped it in the mud. I picked it up again, pulled out a match, and lit it, but the wind blew it out before I could light the candle. I cursed silently and felt around in the mud for the matchbox again. Then I pulled out one more match and finnally lit the candle."