THE REVISED PROLOGUE THUS FAR (thanks to Niek and dotd94) - Dec 11, 2009
Legends tell of a great hero that saved the world from the evil power of the Dark King... Through time many more evils would rise to destroy the peace and harmony. And each time a young boy was chosen to take up the mantle of the hero to fight the darkness with all his might. … As light returned and peace became lasting, the legends of the young heroes were slowly forgotten and for the people the time of heroes seemed to have passed.
In a small village an annual festival of peace is held to honor the young men that had come of age in the past year. Tradition states that these men would prove their skills and honor as warriors. To the best among them are given the title "Guardian of the Festival".
A year has passed and a new festival is about to begin...
ORIGINAL POST BELOW
Here is the story that my Zelda game (The Legend of Zelda: Mythic Realm) starts out with (accompanied by pics, which are not shown here of course):
Long, long ago, legends tell of a great hero that saved the world from a powerful and evil man… this man was known as the Prince of Darkness… even after he was defeated by the Hero, many new evils arose to threaten the lands, but destiny always chose a new hero to rise up to defeat every evil… finally, the day came when there was no more evil to threaten the land, the time for heroes had passed… the land entered in to a time of peace which lasted for many years… The legends of these heroes and the evils they had overcome have faded within time…
In one small village, these legends are still passed on from generation to generation and it is a custom to hold a day of celebration in remembrance of the heroes of the past that have given them freedom and peace. On this day, every boy that has come of age is given a sword in hope that they will follow in the footsteps of the past heroes, to defend the freedom and peace of the land.
In this village, there lives a young boy that had just come of age… a boy named Link...
What I really want is to revise the second paragraph to make it sound right. I think it sounds unprofessional and it's bothering me.
(Note: "..." usually signifies that the pictures are changing. If it matters.)
My main points I am trying to get across in the 2nd paragraph are:1.Most people (kingdoms, tribes, villages, towns, etc) across the lands don't know the legends, BUT this small village (Koro Village) is a rare place that tries to preserve them.
2.There is a day of celebration in remembrance of the legendary heroes.
3.On this day, there is some custom (for some reason) where they (village elders?) give boys that have just become "men" ("of age") a sword, having some kind of reasoning connected to the preservation and remembrance of the legends of the past heroes.
One more thing. If anyone is going to criticize my story, first read this:I know that it sounds very unoriginal (or possibly my standards are too high for myself?), but believe me when I say that the game starts out pretty much like any other Zelda, but it soon drastically changes into a complex story; fresh and new. I believe in making REAL stories with mystery, emotion, plot twists, elements to drive the player to want to know more about the smallest things, depth in characters; all the goods.
Just remember, it is the intro story so give me a break.
Lastly, any thoughts and helps are welcome. Thanks guys!